This is great work, I enjoyed the story and it was very clear. cute ending as well. The only thing i could probably say i would love a little more clarity would just be at the end when the sprout ties up the bird. Will the bird just automatically decide to fly towards the ocean, or will it struggle to escape for a second and maybe then notice the sunset and then decide to fly towards it after giving up on trying to escape. or maybe he tries to escape and the sprout points the sunset and then he changes his mind and flies towards it. just ideas, ha =) but other than that great job
This is great work, I enjoyed the story and it was very clear. cute ending as well. The only thing i could probably say i would love a little more clarity would just be at the end when the sprout ties up the bird. Will the bird just automatically decide to fly towards the ocean, or will it struggle to escape for a second and maybe then notice the sunset and then decide to fly towards it after giving up on trying to escape. or maybe he tries to escape and the sprout points the sunset and then he changes his mind and flies towards it. just ideas, ha =) but other than that great job
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